This is awesome. If I were you I'd focus all my writing time on developing this ghost. Has super potential for a great character and story. Do you want to invest in it so much though? Sure would be a waste to not develop it more, create a new kind of Casper. So many stories can come from this one character, including his own background story.
Hi Michelle, thanks for the feedback! I do feel like this has some good movie potential! However, I have trouble revisiting characters from stories. I feel like the story has been told and if something longer were to come around I would just write it that way. I've got 2-3 now like that, where others have suggested building more into them, but I can't seem to go there. Thanks for reading and for your support!
Quite the ride, Brian. I like the way it unfolded. From a neutral or (possibly) even benevolent spirit slowly to one with a bit of bad to full on malevolence. Yow....
A man's descent to madness turns into a ghost's descent to madness. As usual, your story built on itself so well as more details were revealed and the tone got dark! I was not prepared for Olivia's section 😱 I do not want a ghost stalker, thank you very much.
Thanks, Claire. A regular stalker is bad enough, but a ghost stalker is next level. I usually don't go this dark with the tone, but the theme for the contest was Haunted Hideaways, so I knew I had to pull something a little different out of my hat!
I was surprised to see something this dark from you, that's for sure. But I think you definitely hit the nail on the head for a haunted themed contest.
I truly believe that there are spirits that can not pass on to the next level. Ensnared in their own hell that they created on earth while they were alive. I was relieved when the house burned down along with him never to torture another soul. But to burn in hell for eternity.
Thank you! I was never that big on ghost stories, but this seemed like a good way to approach it, from the ghost's perspective instead of the living. Thank you for reading and for all your support!
This is awesome. If I were you I'd focus all my writing time on developing this ghost. Has super potential for a great character and story. Do you want to invest in it so much though? Sure would be a waste to not develop it more, create a new kind of Casper. So many stories can come from this one character, including his own background story.
Hi Michelle, thanks for the feedback! I do feel like this has some good movie potential! However, I have trouble revisiting characters from stories. I feel like the story has been told and if something longer were to come around I would just write it that way. I've got 2-3 now like that, where others have suggested building more into them, but I can't seem to go there. Thanks for reading and for your support!
Quite the ride, Brian. I like the way it unfolded. From a neutral or (possibly) even benevolent spirit slowly to one with a bit of bad to full on malevolence. Yow....
Thank you, Victor. His malevolence preceded him in the before life and the afterlife!
What delicious malevolence. 🏚️
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A man's descent to madness turns into a ghost's descent to madness. As usual, your story built on itself so well as more details were revealed and the tone got dark! I was not prepared for Olivia's section 😱 I do not want a ghost stalker, thank you very much.
Thanks, Claire. A regular stalker is bad enough, but a ghost stalker is next level. I usually don't go this dark with the tone, but the theme for the contest was Haunted Hideaways, so I knew I had to pull something a little different out of my hat!
I was surprised to see something this dark from you, that's for sure. But I think you definitely hit the nail on the head for a haunted themed contest.
Merry Christmas Brian and a Happy New Year. I'm going to miss reading your stories.
Merry Christmas and Happy New Year to you! Thanks for reading and I'll be back in January with loads of new stories for you to read 😁
Ohhh that was a fantastic read!
I truly believe that there are spirits that can not pass on to the next level. Ensnared in their own hell that they created on earth while they were alive. I was relieved when the house burned down along with him never to torture another soul. But to burn in hell for eternity.
Thank you! I was never that big on ghost stories, but this seemed like a good way to approach it, from the ghost's perspective instead of the living. Thank you for reading and for all your support!