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Tom Pendergast's avatar

Total twilight zone feel ...

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Dascha Paylor 🇨🇦🍁🐻‍❄'s avatar

Wow! I love the way you carry the wind thread throughout the story. Bravo! 👏👏👏

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Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thanks for noticing, Dascha! It was very much on purpose. This was originally meant for a 'zine that is still supposed to be published that focuses on nature's elements. I chose wind 😁

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Dascha Paylor 🇨🇦🍁🐻‍❄'s avatar

You did a great job!

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njakins@me.com's avatar

Excellent writing. I'm wondering if the Carnival is coming to Florida. I can smell the Cotton candy too.

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Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Run! Just kidding. I love the carnival and might even go willingly 😂

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Claire Walster's avatar

This story flows so well! My mood literally changed as I was reading from super light and happy to low-key scared by the end. Like Dashca said, I love the ongoing relationship between the wind and the main character!

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Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thank you, Claire! I was afraid it was too jumpy with the number of section breaks, but I'm glad it still read easy. Thanks for reading!

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Justin Deming's avatar

Loved this, Brian. What an excellent story! I have to say, I really enjoy your stories with young narrators/protagonists. You write them well!

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Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thanks Justin, that means a lot, especially coming from a teacher who is around kids all day! I continue to entertain the idea that there may be a YA novel in my future. Only time will tell.

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Justin Deming's avatar

Yes! I can easily see this happening for you. When the moment is right you’ll know!

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