10 Comments
User's avatar
Jean Marie Bauhaus's avatar

Nicely done. Lots to think about in this. It seems to border on allegory.

Expand full comment
Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thank you, Jean! My fantasy stories definitely take on a more folktale or allegory appeal. I think I'm focusing more on themes when I write them.

Expand full comment
Vince Roman's avatar

Thanks again for sharing! Happy Thursday

Expand full comment
Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thank you for reading Vince!

Expand full comment
Richard Ritenbaugh's avatar

I enjoyed this! I can easily see it being just one scene in a wider story.

Expand full comment
Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thank you, Richard!

Expand full comment
Stephanie Wheeless's avatar

I'd love to see more on this short story. I can see the story expanded out and an epic battle to remove the workers and take down the wall. I enjoyed the little pieces of world building that left me wanting more! Thank you for sharing!

Expand full comment
Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thank you for reading and for your feedback, Stephanie! This definitely could have been expanded to a much longer story, but I love a little mystery... a smaller story within a story. 😁

Expand full comment
Graham Webber's avatar

I like to the gaps left to the readers imagination and the hints as to a better future. Very nicely compressed as well.

Expand full comment
Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thank you for reading and commenting, Graham!

Expand full comment