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Njakins's avatar

This story brought out all kinds of emotions in me. I was angry, sad my arm even hurt! Great writing Brian

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Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thank you, and thank you for taking the time to read some of my "older" stories! I like getting feedback along the way 👍

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Justin Deming's avatar

Loved the story, Brian! The narrator’s voice really drew me in. I thought you nailed it! Also, the images you’ve created for your stories are amazing. Keep up the great work!

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Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thanks Justin! Present tense first person is my favorite to write in, but I know the present tense part does turn off some readers. It has such an immediate quality to it that I've grown to love.

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Claire Walster's avatar

I didn't realize it was present tense first person until I read this comment, and then it clicked! That's what gave the story such a different tone as I was reading. I enjoyed it quite a lot!

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Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thanks Claire! It's definitely a tone that has gained in popularity over the years. I'll definitely be doing more of these in the future 👍

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Ursula Sarracini's avatar

This was a great read! Reminds me of a book I read recently called Klara And The Sun. It explores similar topics around what it means to be human.

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Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thank you Ursula! Thank you also for the book recommendation. I read the plot synopsis and it looks great, so now I have a new book to read 😁

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