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ben woestenburg's avatar

A great story! Somewhat reminiscent of an old fairy tale. Well done! It's the kind of story you could read to your children at bed time. I liked it.

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Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thank you Ben! I grew up reading these types of stories as a kid along with stories from Aesop's Fables, so it looks like there is a little of that hanging around inside my head still!

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Scott Ocamb's avatar

Quite a story, kept me reading and reading. Great job with the character development. I agree with Tom, you have a vivid imagination. Good Job!

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Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thank you Scott! I really appreciate the encouragement.

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Tom Pendergast's avatar

Wow, how did you come up with that? I can’t imagine putting myself in the imaginative space to come up with something like this.

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Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Admittedly, it was a bit more difficult than normal. I'm not adept at writing high fantasy so it takes a lot more brain space and editing!

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Tom Pendergast's avatar

It’s interesting to see you do that. For me, all my stories start with something real that I then imagine turning out differently. I think one of the more interesting parts of reading different Substack writers is just seeing the wide range of ways that people approach writing. Very instructive!

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Justin Deming's avatar

I was happy to see the siblings return home. Great story, Brian! There are a lot of important lessons embedded within it.

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Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thanks Justin! Them returning back was a part of my plan all along 😁 I'm glad you liked it. I know it was a little different than my normal sci-fi or fantasy.

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Njakins's avatar

Very heartwarming Brian. This story reminds me of the days when society was kind and siblings looked after one another. The world is a mess right now. Thank you for giving me that spark of hope.

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Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thank you! I come from a closeknit family of one older sister and two older brothers, and so the relationship here is a product of that. I want to write more positive stories like this about lessons learned, and so there will definitely be more😁

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J. C. Paschal's avatar

Brian,

I enjoyed reading it. Very good.

Papa

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Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thank you, Dad! I appreciate you and Mom's support and encouragement!

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Claire Walster's avatar

Great one, Brian! Your ending delivered exactly what I was hoping for.

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Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thanks Claire! I knew I wanted to bring the family back together again and make sure it was a happy ending 😁

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