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Johnathan Reid's avatar

It takes skill to craft a perfect little vignette of something as cliched as alien abduction, Brian. But I think you've done it. It was almost religious in its connotations, and the family connections were beautifully woven. I felt a 'Tales From The Loop' ambience with some Close Encounters mystique. Well done.

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Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thank you, Johnathan, for reading and commenting! I've managed a few of these and I enjoy exploring this little subgenre for some reason. It's a lot of fun to try and use them as a springboard to explore interpersonal relationships.

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Jim Cummings's avatar

Great story, Brian. Complex and thoughtful. Bittersweet ending where he realizes his denial and wants to help his son remember.

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Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thank you, Jim! I considered a more positive, hopeful ending, hinting toward his return, but sometimes you get to the end and that's just the end. Thanks again for reading and commenting. I appreciate your support.

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EJ Trask's avatar

this is beautiful and your dialogue is ace

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Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thank you, EJ! I really enjoy writing dialogue and building that relationship between the characters.

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Claudia Befu's avatar

This was beautifully written and it drew me right in. Great job, Brian! 👏

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Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thank you, Claudia! I appreciate you reading and commenting.

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Isaiah Sanford's avatar

I enjoyed this. The way you establish the emotional dynamics of such a simple idea was well done.

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Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thank you, Isaiah! I enjoy writing these 1200-1500 word short stories. It challenges me to pull the most out of the characters in a brief time.

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williamphaynes/elliott's avatar

Wonderful fairy like tale well done

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Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thank you!

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