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J. C. Paschal's avatar

Brian,

I enjoyed reading the story.

J. C.

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Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thank you 😁

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Justin Deming's avatar

Great story, Brian! Congratulations on the honorable mention, too!

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Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thanks, Justin! One step closer to publication 😁

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Tom Pendergast's avatar

I’ve been saving this for when I had more time and it was worth it--as Scott mentioned, you did more work with character building and it paid off

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Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thanks so much Tom, I appreciate it. One thing I've been trying to focus more on is a character's arc through a short story. While it's not significant, it does help people to invest more in it. Hopefully that comes through in future stories as well. Thanks for reading!

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Mark M.'s avatar

Great story, Brian!

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Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thanks for reading, Mark!

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Jessica B. Sokol's avatar

Congratulations on the honorable mention! Good stuff!

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Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thank you, Jessica! It was a welcome surprise 😁

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Njakins's avatar

Excellent read I wish the story wouldn't end. Now I'll think of my future all day wondering if I too have a long life. Good job Brian

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Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thank you Njakins! It's always a challenge to figure out how a story should end. The great thing about this story is it reminds us to live the best life we've got now, no matter how long we live. Thanks for reading!

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Scott Ocamb's avatar

Excellent job. I admire how you are able to build characters in your work, you make us care about them. Thanks and good job.

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Brian Reindel 👾⚔️'s avatar

Thanks so much, Scott! I appreciate that feedback 👍

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