Very cool. I wondered after reading this how it would work in first person POV, but you do an amazing job of getting under the skin of your protagonist even in third person. You'll have to give me some feedback on my upcoming story. It's 3rd person and it's fantasy. Two areas I don't usually hang out in. 🙂 I also think you managed the dialect and speech elements really well. It was just enough--without being too much--to get it in my ear. Or the ear part of my eyes, because I was reading it. 😂 Nice work.
Thanks for the feedback, Meg! I usually start with an idea in first person, and then decide to move to third person if I feel like I can't do the character justice. I would love to read your story! I really appreciated the feedback you gave me on my last submission, and I would provide you with whatever feedback you want -- structural or otherwise. Regarding the Creole accent especially, I'm not sure I could do that for a whole novel. Something tells me people would be unamused 😒
At this point I'm just planning to post the sucker on Saturday. 🙂 But feel free to jump in the comments with thoughts. Will just be looking for general feedback at this stage, where I hit or missed in the genre department for instance.
Very cool. I wondered after reading this how it would work in first person POV, but you do an amazing job of getting under the skin of your protagonist even in third person. You'll have to give me some feedback on my upcoming story. It's 3rd person and it's fantasy. Two areas I don't usually hang out in. 🙂 I also think you managed the dialect and speech elements really well. It was just enough--without being too much--to get it in my ear. Or the ear part of my eyes, because I was reading it. 😂 Nice work.
Thanks for the feedback, Meg! I usually start with an idea in first person, and then decide to move to third person if I feel like I can't do the character justice. I would love to read your story! I really appreciated the feedback you gave me on my last submission, and I would provide you with whatever feedback you want -- structural or otherwise. Regarding the Creole accent especially, I'm not sure I could do that for a whole novel. Something tells me people would be unamused 😒
At this point I'm just planning to post the sucker on Saturday. 🙂 But feel free to jump in the comments with thoughts. Will just be looking for general feedback at this stage, where I hit or missed in the genre department for instance.
I'm going to tear it to shreds!!! Just kidding. I'm sure it will be fine, but I'll point out anything if it sticks out at me 😁
Oh Wow! This is excellent writing Brian Love loved it!
Thank you!
Loved this, Brian! I enjoy your stories that deal with local legends. The characters in this one came to life before me!
Thanks, Justin! These stories are definitely easier in the sense they've given me a backdrop to play against. I've been noodling this one for awhile 😁
Brian, this is the best yet! I love this one.
Thanks, Tom! Pulling from local legend makes it all that much more fun.