My heart was pounding wondering how is he going to escape the fortune teller was only able to see so much. Or did the fortune teller summon the Crows? But it was she who saved him in the end. Will the Light now shine brilliantly and the Darkness slowly fade? Excellent read!
Loved it, Brian! The repetition throughout was wonderful, and the word play at the end was so fun. I could totally see him being lifted away with the crows!
Great story! I'm supposed to be leaving to take my kid to school, but you had your story hooks in me and I had to finish reading. (I'm sure I'll still get her there on time, otherwise I'll write her a great excuse note)
I really like your vivid descriptions and how you kept the action going with repetition! The fortune teller's cryptic predictions added an intriguing layer of mystery while also exploring themes of destiny and the struggle between light and darkness.
I love the word play on "murder of crows!" Well woven, intricate short story.
You caught me by surprise with the play on words! ;)
Wow! What a cleverly written tale, Brian. The pacing was perfect, and I didn’t see the twist coming at all. I loved this from start to finish!
Ha! Wonderful twist! :D
My heart was pounding wondering how is he going to escape the fortune teller was only able to see so much. Or did the fortune teller summon the Crows? But it was she who saved him in the end. Will the Light now shine brilliantly and the Darkness slowly fade? Excellent read!
Loved it, Brian! The repetition throughout was wonderful, and the word play at the end was so fun. I could totally see him being lifted away with the crows!
Very vivid story. Good job.
Yesss, fantastic!! The fortune teller speaks in riddles! Had me from start to finish. ✨
Great story! I'm supposed to be leaving to take my kid to school, but you had your story hooks in me and I had to finish reading. (I'm sure I'll still get her there on time, otherwise I'll write her a great excuse note)
Gosh! Well done, Brian!
I really like your vivid descriptions and how you kept the action going with repetition! The fortune teller's cryptic predictions added an intriguing layer of mystery while also exploring themes of destiny and the struggle between light and darkness.
Bravo! Good feint with words mixed with all the richness of fantasy.