Lots of people think that sci-fi means exploding spaceships and nasty aliens—I like to call that “surface-level sci-fi”—and they completely forget the real reason anyone ever wants to tell a story—the human aspect.
Thanks, Meg! I ended it that way in my first draft, and was going to publish it that way, and then I went on a walk, my brain started working, and the second piece popped in my head. I'm glad to have received your feedback. 😁
Great story! I found it more mysterious if u stopped at “end transmission”. But I also like the last section as it allowed for more possibility for more... is he dead or not? Will he find Prudence again? Thank you for this read !
Great story, Brian! I listened as I took my walk and it was riveting! I find myself wondering (hoping) if there will be a sequel to let us know what happened to him!
Thank you so much, Shielagh! How exciting that you're listening while on an activity. I love that! The audio reader for Substack really is great. I like to leave a little up to the imagination of the reader on some of my stories, but I think there's one version where he could make it back to Prudence... or, some version of him makes it back. 😁
This should be a new genre—“Raw, human sci-fi”.
Fantastic read!
Thank you, Sujan, I often wonder if my sci-fi is too sentimental, but I love the term you gave it! Thanks for reading and commenting.
Ha, cheers!
Lots of people think that sci-fi means exploding spaceships and nasty aliens—I like to call that “surface-level sci-fi”—and they completely forget the real reason anyone ever wants to tell a story—the human aspect.
This, I think you do really well...hats off!
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No way is your fiction too sentimental. The scenes of palpable human feelings in a sci-fi setting are why I enjoy reading your stories.
Thank you, Miriam, I greatly appreciate that!
You ARE a romance head.
Loved this.
TBH. I wanted it to end with "end transmission." I was both teary and eyed and satisfied at that point.
I didn't need the rest of it. But that's just one take on an awesome story.
Thanks, Meg! I ended it that way in my first draft, and was going to publish it that way, and then I went on a walk, my brain started working, and the second piece popped in my head. I'm glad to have received your feedback. 😁
Agreed with Meg on the ending. I didn’t need the “coda.”
Gah, still learning to trust that instinct! But I'm really happy you both let me know. That kind of feedback is very helpful.
I found myself reading faster just to see what happened. Superb Brian!
Thanks, Jim, I'm glad it's because you were excited to read, and it wasn't one of "Ugh, when will this ever end!" 🤣
Great story! I found it more mysterious if u stopped at “end transmission”. But I also like the last section as it allowed for more possibility for more... is he dead or not? Will he find Prudence again? Thank you for this read !
Thank you for reading, Joleen, and thank you for the additional feedback! It really helps me improve as an author.
A fascinating, small, human story that then hints at something much larger in the conclusion.
Any plans for a follow-up, Brian? :)
Thanks, Simon! No plans right now, but I'll never say never. 😁
Oh man, Brian, that was such a sweet story! I didn’t know you had this kind of soft spot ... Well done.
Thanks Tom! I'm definitely the softy in our family. A hard chocolate exterior with a caramel center.
Great story, Brian! I listened as I took my walk and it was riveting! I find myself wondering (hoping) if there will be a sequel to let us know what happened to him!
Thank you so much, Shielagh! How exciting that you're listening while on an activity. I love that! The audio reader for Substack really is great. I like to leave a little up to the imagination of the reader on some of my stories, but I think there's one version where he could make it back to Prudence... or, some version of him makes it back. 😁
Either sounds intriguing!
Full of heart. Great read.
Thank you, I appreciate that!
Thank you, Peter, I appreciate your feedback, and I love a good multi layered story!